Chapter Eleven Page 5
posted 26th Jul 2017, 5:01 PM
26th Jul 2017, 5:01 PM
Saeriellyn
Surprise update! I should wait until Thursday but I love so much how this page came out I can't stand it. So yeah.
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26th Jul 2017, 9:13 PM
LMS
You have a right. It's gorgeous, and I love the way you've kept the essence of the story but changed it so it's your own here. The personalities of the characters show through so well--Taran cares about Eilonwy, but he really wants to see that sword, too! The details you added are great. The dirt, the blood. Is that some stubble on Fflewddur? They've been running a full day and night by now. Well done. And thank you! :)
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27th Jul 2017, 1:03 PM
Saeriellyn
Thank you dear! I love how you notice the details. Yep, Fflewddur's sporting some growth; realistically he should have more, but let's pretend he'd just shaved the morning before Achren tossed him in the dungeon. XD
It's somewhat challenging to show exactly how much time passes while they are traveling; counting up actual days revealed in the text makes it seem like only a week or so, but this does not seem very plausible, even if they save significant time by cutting through the Fair Folk realm. Not sure how I'm going to show it all! But I'm getting ahead of myself.
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26th Jul 2017, 11:11 PM
Odd May
Oh my gosh I love this page! The colors of the first panel are just gorgeous! And Fflewddur is so fatherly and adorable!
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28th Jul 2017, 3:21 AM
mantis
Second what Odd May said about the sunrise colors -- that background is lovely. Sleepy Eilonwy is adorable, and Fflewddur's obvious affection for her reminds me of your double drabble "Almost" on FFNet. The guys' expressions in the last panel are great, too. Poor Taran just can't catch a break, even if he was just trying to make her more comfortable in this case. Should've listened to the bard -- a Fflam is prudent, at least about some things. ;-)
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28th Jul 2017, 2:22 PM
Saeriellyn
Yes I had that drabble in mind here! From a practical point Fflewddur is the only one strong enough to pick her up, but it did make for a good little insight moment into his character.
I can't decide if Taran's motivations are truly purely altruistic here. I think he's mostly concerned about her comfort, but it still is a pretty convenient excuse for getting his hands on the sword. Lucky for him that E isn't quite as far gone as she seems. And this whole paragraph is, I think, exactly what's running through Fflewddur's head at the moment.
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28th Jul 2017, 2:03 PM
mjkj
Poor Eilonwy... so battered...
*lol* he definitely had that coming... =P
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28th Jul 2017, 3:35 PM
joeyballast
Eilonwy's like every cat I was afraid of growing up. Sleeping... Sleeping... SleeSLAPYOUINDAFACE!
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Sleeping...
Beautiful choice of colours in the first panel by the way. I'm always a fan of silhouettes.
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29th Jul 2017, 4:48 AM
Saeriellyn
hahaha yes they do that don't they.
Thanks! I like silhouettes myself, if for no other reason than they save time in production. :P
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29th Jul 2017, 10:10 PM
RHYMESOFTHERENEGADES
A thought just occurred to me, can animals be made into cauldronborn? Couldn't Arawn have made tireless horses for his warriors. I guess we should assume the answer is no since he didn't, but in that case the question is why not. Animals in the Prydain-verse are shown to be very often sentient, almost or even definitely people themselves. What prevents them from being re-animated?
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30th Jul 2017, 10:48 PM
Saeriellyn
Good question. Perhaps one of those things we should not poke too hard lest the story-logic not add up! Right up there with a point made by another reader, which was that they could have just shot the horses early on and not have had so much trouble outrunning the CB.
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30th Jul 2017, 6:37 AM
Rob S.
A beautiful page, from the first panel's colors to Fflewddur's knowing grin at the end.
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30th Jul 2017, 10:49 PM
Saeriellyn
Thank you! This page really did pull together very well.
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29th Aug 2018, 5:09 AM
BlueDragon
As always, your expressions are awesome! A sly smile from Fflewddur :3
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