Chapter Fourteen page thirteen

posted 22nd Sep 2019, 1:29 PM

Chapter Fourteen page thirteen
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22nd Sep 2019, 1:29 PM

Saeriellyn

I'm always torn about these landscapey pages that are very short on dialog and action, wondering if people feel cheated that so relatively little happens in such a long page...I was tempted to condense, but ultimately my gut tells me it's important to set a scene, that the landscape of Prydain is as much a character as the people, and that the overall mood helps to underscore the emotion of the characters. Lloyd doesn't belabor the horrible weather in this part, and Melyngar's stumble just gets one sentence...yet everything taken together visually makes it so much more dramatic, reminds us that this is an exhausting and arduous journey, and perhaps gives a little more context for subsequent decisions that otherwise might seem foolish.

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22nd Sep 2019, 2:06 PM

MK_Wizard

Yikes. Poor horse.

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23rd Sep 2019, 1:42 AM

Saeriellyn

She’s a war horse. It’s all in a day’s work for her.

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25th Sep 2019, 6:14 PM

Honzinator

Seems more in a day's work for a pack-horse. That them there's some serious drop-off.
It reminds me a lot of Tolkien, frankly, and did even in my head when I read it in the book.
I always picture myself on some lovely looking but nasty to traverse path in the Sierra Nevadas, Alps, Rockies or Iceland instead of Britain's relatively kindly mountains when I read this. You captured it better than that.

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25th Sep 2019, 6:17 PM

Saeriellyn

Britain’s green hills do have an easier overall look, but areas in Scotland and around Snowdonia can hold their own with anything in the Rockies. There is some super treacherous terrain in pockets.

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22nd Sep 2019, 5:05 PM

Rob S.

Definitely -- taking the time to expand and dramatize the little moments (and contract others, where necessary) is part of what makes adaptations so interesting! (And, in the case of yours, breathtaking.)

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23rd Sep 2019, 1:43 AM

Saeriellyn

That’s my goal!

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23rd Sep 2019, 12:46 AM

Skyboy91

The tones and art in this page do such a great job of bringing to mind a powerful storm in the mountains, makes me think of some of the deluges I have been in hiking. I know landscape pages aren't your favorite but you do a great job with them. Some things do need to be said without words. What happens between Medwyn and the next big event is always a bit blurry in my head, so you've put a powerful image there now.

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23rd Sep 2019, 1:44 AM

Saeriellyn

Ahh, well! It’s good to know I’m successful at it, even if it’s not my first choice! (Though I don’t mind landscapes so much when they’re inspired by Wales...and I absolutely prefer them to architecture.)

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23rd Sep 2019, 1:40 AM

The Doodler

Guh. Terrifying.

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23rd Sep 2019, 3:33 PM

LMS

Your instinct is right here. Taran, at this stage in his life, can be rash and impetuous, but he's never stupid. He does what he does very shortly because, to him, it makes sense. It seems right. (And, in the end, fate or destiny or the Powers that Be conspired so that it was right, and the quest could never have been successfully completed without what seemed at the time a mistake.)

Also, it's nice to highlight again that adventures, in actuality, ARE nasty, uncomfortable things. Make you late for dinner. You've done a good job of showing how cold (nice with the steamy breath) and miserable the companions probably are just now.

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24th Sep 2019, 1:52 AM

Saeriellyn

It’s an interesting scene this, particularly the dynamic of the conflict coming up on the next page, and what it says about the growth he still needs...not to get ahead of myself though.

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24th Sep 2019, 2:47 AM

CA

You were spot-on in designing the page this way. We've talked in the comments before about Lloyd's "efficient" writing style, which is really good for the most part but can leave you wanting more at times. You almost don't realize the horrible weather conditions when reading text, but it is important context in setting up future actions and conveying the stakes. Very nice!

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24th Sep 2019, 9:35 PM

Saeriellyn

Yes indeed! I love the leisure to develop this stuff...one of several ways I comfort myself about this being unauthorized. If I had an editor I would have far less freedom.

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24th Sep 2019, 9:22 PM

CM

And *I* always wonder if gushing her your work will start to feel hollow. (Probably one reason I don't always comment, even though I read everything a few times.) But this is a beautiful page. Thank you for not depriving us of it through any too-strict devotion to Alexander's minimalist style. Different mediums. Your work is minimalist in its own way, but atmospherically rich and expressive. (Dare I say "expansive" since expansive may be said in many ways?)

Also, I love the little touches here that either convey character, or atmosphere, mood, and sensation: the mist rising off the mountains, the rainwater running down them; the breath ghosting from Fflewddur and Eilonwy, the water running off Taran's hair; Eilonwy patting Melyngar reassuringly in the last scene. And, finally, a brief view of the Black Lake in the lower right corner of the whole panel, very visually foreSHADOWING.

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24th Sep 2019, 9:42 PM

Saeriellyn

I assure you I never get tired of anyone gushing over pages, particularly when you point out those details. If they aren’t noted I do wonder if anyone noticed - not that I wouldn’t have done them anyway; it all adds up to a whole greater than the sum of its parts that I hope registers on a subliminal level even if people don’t actually verbalize it. But it’s so gratifying when they do. It’s like people noticing you dyed your hair or lost weight and saying how great you look.

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